pre-raphaelite1.livejournal.com ([identity profile] pre-raphaelite1.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] wildestranger 2005-11-20 09:46 am (UTC)

*sneaks in late, cursing LJ*

This is beautiful. The opening about Bill is simple but very powerful. Cutting his throat does feel right.

I do like your portrayal of Fleur. She's a much more real character here. She's so often cast off as the glib, simpering French girl. People forget that she was a triwizard champion so she must have brains and courage and... Oh god, I've just become a Fleur advocate! *giggles*

As always, I love your Remus... This line I absolutely adore: She lives with Luna, who is stranger than all the English put together, but she doesn’t treat Fleur as foreign, and Fleur likes her. *cackles*

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